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This term we are writing speeches, I have chosen to write my speech on mental health, because i think it is a big problem in our world today. Here is a paragraph I have wroten:
1 in 6 New Zealanders are diagnosed with a mental disorder at some point in their life. This means that around 833333 people struggle with mental illness. Having a mental illness is draining. Everyday is a battle. You lose friends and the things you used to enjoy aren't fun anymore, but still mental health isn't treated the same as physical health. Mental health is just as important as physical health. Why? Because if you aren't happy living your day to day life or you don't see the point in getting up in the morning then there is a problem. We need to fix it. New Zealand has the highest teen suicide rate in the world. In 2016 data shows that 554 people committed suicide. 554 people took their own lives because they didn't think there was a way out. In the whole world around every 40 second someone takes their own life. This needs to be talked about more.
Comment question: Please comment some feedback or what you think I should include In my speech
Kia Ora Harriet,
ReplyDeleteThis is amazing because it is such a big problem and you are raising awareness on a large problem.
you taught me that every 40 seconds sombody will take their life due to mental health.
Maybe next time you could makeall the writing fit on the page.
Why did you choose mental health ?
Kind Regards Leandri