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Thursday, July 30, 2020

Descriptive Hansel And Gretel Writing

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Today I will be sharing some of the sentences I wrote about Hansel And Gretel. Here they are: 

The smell of the cadys drew me into the house, all of a sudden the lucios gingerbread door swung open missing gretel by inches. An old lady, who was hunched over like a walking stick wobbled out the door. She smelt florally but her clothes smelt musty and old, like they had been sitting in the wardrobe for months. 


The sweet scents drew me into the house, just as I had gotten close to the door, out of nowhere a wrinkly old lady appeared. She smelt floraly and like an old perfume. I looked down at her long feet, her shoes were pointy but I could see the shape of fat toes bursting out the sides. 


As we came closer to the house made out of sweets, a musty smell wafted under our noses. BOOM. The gingerbread door that was in the front of the cottage had been swung open and slammed shut. COming towards us was an old lady. Her back was hunched over and her face was wrinkly. We could hear her heaving as she walked over to us.


“Hello children” The old lady snarled. A forced smile plastered her wrinkly, old face.”Would you like to come inside?” She waved her hand invitingly pointing towards the direction of the cottage.


“How are you today?” A voice crackled from behind us. We turned around to see a hunched over old lady with frilly clothes. 


“Hello Children” A small, short lady squealed from behind. SHe stumbled over to us holding a basket full of candies and chocolates. “Come inside dearies, I have so many treats for you” She started walking backwards, closer to the house. 


Hansel and I had been walking all day. When we finally got to the gingerbread house we decided to sit down and have a rest, as we were sleeping an wrinkly hunched over lady appeared out of nowhere, Hansel woke up to hear breathing into his face and touching his cheeks. 


Gretel and I found an old lady outside of the house who was wrinkly and hunched over. We found her gardening round the back. Even her garden had lollies in it. 


We walked round and round the house, trying to see if there was anyone home. Just as we had given up an frail old lady jumped in front of us she was trying to convince us to get inside her house and after a long day of walking we both decided it was for the best to go in and have a rest.


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